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    That first poem got power. I like it and it rocks.

    The second poem, as much as it reminds me of my past experience, (I was the friend who couldn't handle being a friend anymore) I feel it could use a little work. I don't know, but it lacked something for me. I don't know, maybe it's because my head is reeling from the first poem then I came across the second poem and not looking too closely. Not one to criticize... hell, I'm not even sure. I'll read it again later...

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    There's loneliness in the radios...

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    It's Ok, I typed the second poem last night through tears...I just wanted to get the feelings out, and away from me. That poem means nothing to me now, so if you want to critcize go ahead...I'm just not going to touch it cause it's such a fresh and raw wound....

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    ~There are a great many people in the country today who, through no fault of their own, are sane.~
    ~Is that my hand in your pocket or am I just happy to see you?~
    ~You want me to dress up as Wonderwoman, tie you up in my golden lariat and make you tell the truth, don't you?~
    ~A super-calloused fragile mystic cursed with halitosis~ *prov. by Dano*

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    *hugs AsIs and Bran* Thanks

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    ~There are a great many people in the country today who, through no fault of their own, are sane.~
    ~Is that my hand in your pocket or am I just happy to see you?~
    ~You want me to dress up as Wonderwoman, tie you up in my golden lariat and make you tell the truth, don't you?~
    ~A super-calloused fragile mystic cursed with halitosis~ *prov. by Dano*

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    I've done it before
    It is nothing new
    Held it poised
    Above my breast

    A steady hand
    A strong will
    A little nick here
    A little gouge there

    The blade seers
    But I don't feel a thing
    I am numb
    My heart is dead

    I feel the stickiness
    Not the warmth
    That it once had
    Just viscosity

    I see it
    A blazing red streak
    A beacon across
    Pale white skin

    My skin, pale
    That is mine
    My blood
    My hurt spilled

    My eyes well up
    I've done it before
    I'll do it again



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    Winter came
    And winter went
    I'm in the summer
    Of my contempt
    Spring is here
    Oh what joy
    The time of year
    To screw the toy
    Winter went
    I feel the same
    All is lost
    Til I came
    I hold fast
    To my hope
    That I'll find
    Another way to cope
    Hours go by
    It's all the same
    I've done it again
    Here's to my shame


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    ~There are a great many people in the country today who, through no fault of their own, are sane.~
    ~Is that my hand in your pocket or am I just happy to see you?~
    ~You want me to dress up as Wonderwoman, tie you up in my golden lariat and make you tell the truth, don't you?~
    ~A super-calloused fragile mystic cursed with halitosis~ *prov. by Dano*
    ~These pants contain the ultimate power in the Universe. I suggest we use it.~

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    *big hug*

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    Wow. That last one in particular. Wow.

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    Branflakes. The Ninja Lesbian. The Milk Getter. The Hair Gel Getter. I get it all!
    I'm the Butch.
    The one Necro calls "brain".
    I walk the path, trying not to get pulled into the weeds.
    "walking away, no longer running."--NecroFlash
    "See that star...the one shining brighter than all the others? I know the girl who hung it there."

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    *grins sheepishly* Thanks Bran *hugs Dano and Bran* Thanks you two

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    I feel an ache
    I'm weak and tired
    I don't want to cry
    I feel it welling
    Welling up inside
    I had it in my grasp

    A promise to keep
    I keep promises

    A secret to keep
    I keep secrets

    The line is dead
    I gasp
    I moan
    I want to scream
    But I whine instead
    Through gritted teeth
    And clenched fists
    Tears come and they go
    I want what is best
    For you and not me

    hmm, there might be more


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    ~There are a great many people in the country today who, through no fault of their own, are sane.~
    ~Is that my hand in your pocket or am I just happy to see you?~
    ~You want me to dress up as Wonderwoman, tie you up in my golden lariat and make you tell the truth, don't you?~
    ~A super-calloused fragile mystic cursed with halitosis~ *prov. by Dano*
    ~These pants contain the ultimate power in the Universe. I suggest we use it.~

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    My mind is blazing
    Spots appear before my eyes
    I cringe
    Poised
    The pain is there
    Then it's gone
    A pain as sweet as honey
    One that I have almost forgotten
    Do you hear it?
    I do...it calls me
    I feel it too
    A white hot pain
    Across my breast
    If I died now
    I would forget
    I would not remember
    I would be forgotten
    I would not be remembered

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